you obveously care

• Artist: The T O X I C papercut
• Description: ahhh,it's just somethin' i made...bored.I like poetry,so i wanna get better....can i get some feedback??
• Date: 03/17/2009
• Tags: obveously care

you're here every step of the way,
in hardships you make me feel ok.
you're always making me feel like the apple of your eye,
even thuogh i do lie.
you are always there,
wich lets me know you care.
and when i'm in despair,
you can barely bare it.
i sincerely know you care.

Comments

[ashtastetherainbow]

Well, you need to get a beta or something? The spelling is a little off. Try messing around with line length and adding punctuation that makes it flow. I like the idea. It's cute. <3