Good Bye

• Artist: I Am LiViNg___NiGhTmArE
• Description: I know this is not all that great but this was my first poem. If you want, you can tell me what I can do to make it better. I wrote this when I felt really depressed one day.
• Date: 03/29/2009
• Tags: good

You know something is wrong,
I tell you I am fine,
You ask again until you gave up,
I am being eating away in side,
I feel so lonely,
I get worse each day,
I don't know what to do anymore,
There is nothing you can say,
I am tired of people looking down to me,
I let it get to me,
Now all of my smiles have become fake,
When I was little,
I never thought this would happen to me,
It's time for me to go now,
I am prepared to die,
So long,
For now I will say Good-Bye!

Comments

[I Am LiViNg___NiGhTmArE]

Ok thank you! wink

[Miekka Kuoleman]

it's good don't use so many complete phases you want it to flow more than have correct grammar. also use contractions in a couple places it would sound a whole lot better and don't worry about rhyming you have your own version of free style ^_^