Same

• Artist: Kitty_Want_Hugs_XD
• Description: This is one of my many versions of this poem(also my most recent x3) I've been working on this(off and on) for about a year now. My reading teacher told us to write a poem about anything, so i decided to mess with this one. She thought it was pretty good, buuuh, she was just being nice. :3 I know its pretty short. So, tell me what ya think, dont critizise to badly. Im at a writers block, sooo any notes and tips are greatly appreciated ^^;
  Thaaanks x3
  (PS, i took that piccy ^o^ )
• Date: 03/30/2009
• Tags: same monotone short poem plain

From night to day its all the same.
Same face, same places, same problems.
Nothing is changing, its all the same.
The monotony of it all...
So dull...
So boring...
Can't wait to get out.
Can't wait to get away.
Can't wait for that one moment of true freedom.

From night to day, its all the same.
I cant wait to finish this game...

Comments

[vampireneko57]

cool

[Kitty_Want_Hugs_XD]

Thanks ^^ I'll be sure to pay some more attention to that :3

[Sunafire]

I like the rhyming going on here, it gives the whole poem a nice rhythm.
And it's alright for a poem to be short! Better than it dragging on for pages and pages.

I actually love it smile I think the only thing you could do to make it better is maybe revisit that last line, it doesnt fit the rest of the poem as well as the other lines do.