We Will Last Forever

• Artist: LOCKOUT125
• Description: This is a poem about 2 someone's who want to make it last forever. Maybe you and your special someone. No one specific. I hope you enjoy but I have my own scenario that made me write this.
  This type iof poem is called a Villanelle which goes with a rhyme scheme of A1,A2,a,b,A1,A2,a,b. It also can only have 4 lines a stanza and at least 4 stanzas.
  ETC. If you understand the pattern th poem will make mroe sense.SLightly
• Date: 04/03/2009
• Tags: will last forever lockout125 love

We Will Last Forever
Impossible to separate
We've been through so much
We even lost our special moments together

We Will Last Forever
Impossible to seaprate
Times flying by faster than we can say "such."
I thought you said "We Will Last Forever."

What happened to that
We aren't two anymore
Your skin is too beautiful to touch
The ending was caused by your weather

We Will Last Forever
Impossible to separate
I'm hurt so bad, my Heart needs a crutch to stand
This is the last song ever

We Will Last Forever
Impossible to Separate
We've been through so much
This is the last song ever

Comments

[Jarmis]

You followed the format for a villanelle, alright... Other than that, the metaphors were a bit weak. I've never heard of an ending caused by someone's "weather" before.

No offense, but with so many poems written about love out there, you really need to make it more powerful if it's going to stand out. 2/5

[Nurse Katherine]

one word=love: