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Spring has sprung
Trees have sung
Flowers bloom
Under the moon
Rays of sun
Barbecues with buns
Happieness grows
Good thing theres no snow
Chidren play
A beautiful day
Cat's purr
With pretty fur
Spring has sprung
Trees have sung
Flowers bloom
Under the moon
- by Jolly Indigirl |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/11/2009 |
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- Title: Spring Time
- Artist: Jolly Indigirl
- Description: A Lovely Poem
- Date: 04/11/2009
- Tags: spring time
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Comments (7 Comments)
- chloecarebear - 06/03/2009
- i thought that was a great poem you are great at writting poems, saddly im terrible but im better at making up storys than rhyming hrrrrmmmm let me think 7/10
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- II--F4LL3N-4NG3L--II - 04/29/2009
- *sighs* 3/5
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- LordOfTheAsylum - 04/18/2009
- hahaha, this must be a joke...
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- xXBisexual FlanXx - 04/16/2009
- Honestly? The poem has forced rhymes, too many typos and spelling errors for my liking(how do forget the 'l' in 'children'?), and all in all, just sort of feels weird, like it was thrown together at the last second. It's good to see that not all poems are gothic, though, which might raise your score a bit, but I doubt it. You need to work at it, but this is a promising beginning. Don't give up yet!
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- Bannelore - 04/16/2009
- Decent. 3/5
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- uhlissuhkeightlynn - 04/16/2009
- 3
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- starbolt22 - 04/16/2009
- Ehhh... Meh. 3/5
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