Black poetry

• Artist: GK201_AML
• Description: hope u like it.........
• Date: 04/23/2009
• Tags: black poetry

Memories lost
Dreams recalled
Fantasy flies
Reality's ghost

Stories untold
Silence heard
Mind clouds
Thoughts escape

Love remembered
Lost in time
Eyes cloud
Soul searches

Comments

[ProfessorKC]

Not bad. Slightly unconnected in imagery but it does actually use metaphor which is a rarity in this forum. COmplaring memories to the ghost of reality and the final stanza where love is remembered (remembered as a ghost of reality? nice one that) and would be why the soul searches shows some cohesion but the middle stanza, though pertinent is confuddled .. Keep it in the love genre and think about things people should say but don't to each other in that stanza. Might work better.

[Gothique Jedi]

5/5

[mi_precious]

deep