Wandering Dream

• Artist: METRO SKiiES
• Description: A poem I wrote in my math class today, May 12, 2009. I was rather bored and this sappy tale I'd been bouncing around in my head the past few days just kind of poured itself out onto my paper. I know it's cliche, but I still think it sounds nice. I think the audience here will be a little more welcoming than the audience at school. I was inspired by the struggles of Darrow in Kate Constable's novel "The Waterless Sea" and the rest of the trilogy, as well as fantasy and romance in general.
• Date: 05/12/2009
• Tags: wandering dream love ocean wishes

Wandering Dream

The lonely sea calls him.
I should have known he would not stay.
Who can hold a wanderer back?
Who can stop a dream fleeing the dawn?

The sighing winds call him.
It seems only yesterday he came.
He filled my heart with leaping joy.
Now it spills its thousand tears in silence.

The swaying boat calls him.
He asks me to come and see the world.
I wish that I could follow him there,
But I am bound by the ancient roots of the land.

The gentle waves call him.
I know he longs to sail again.
I know he waits for me to come free.
I see the pain in his sorrowful gaze.

A wandering dream calls me.
Hope gives me strength,
Love gives me courage,
And I know I cannot stay.

Comments

[Pensive Cliffhanger]

Beautiful. I love it. Free verse is my favored poetic form myself. Keep up the excellent work.

[ArcVoyageur]

Free verse is more abstract in my opinion, though I like to rhyme a lot and use odd rhyme schemes. I liked this better than "Hero's Awakening"; much less generic idea, and you didn't spill out the inner meaning in the context.

[Kuchuni]

Very nice! As a fellow poet- I salute you. The theme is good and I liked the style a lot. Keep up the good work. The third verse is my favotire fwi. ^^

[Diosa de Armarrio]

Yet ANOTHER great poem! It really is nice to read good poetry here on Gaia for a change. Keep it up!

[AntiAntiKitsch]

Pleasantly cheesy, and a very nice poem. Much better than I could hope to write. Continue wrtiting please! 5/5

[Ame_To_Ame]

Bwahaha. -Falls backwards in shock- Since when did Gaia arenas acquire a GOOD writer? When did this happen? How come I was not informed?
Honestly, there's perfect grammar as far as I can tell, I like the idea. Okay, personally I think the third and second to last lines are cheesy, but -shrugs- what can you do?
Seriously, keep it up. 5/5