lovers fate

• Artist: humdut1
• Description:
  sorry about the last 1 this is the 1 with corrections
• Date: 06/06/2009
• Tags: proper lovers fate

Lovers fate
Looking at each other,
Face to face.
Not glaring at the nights stars or space,
Making it a loving death.
Getting out that air slowly,
Afraid of their last breath.
Constricted by love and hate,
It was just fate.
They knew they will never part,
But they knew death was near a shot by a gun, blood dripping from their hearts.
Left at the edge of a cliff not to die in vain,
To die physically and mentally in pain.
Love was their lifetime,
They looked at each other a said love is mine.
Their they were,
Their they lain,
Their last words my love I will see you again.
By humdut1

Comments

[Polly Odd]

I like the content. Very deep. Maybe work on flow? If you like rhyming, maybe use the same number of syllables in each sentence. Otherwise, it's great! 4/5 =)
Rate/comment me pelase!

[riseark]

^^ nice and sorta ironic

[xXxEmmeryxXx]

it beatiful

4/5

~emily

[humdut1]

ty

[omg its willie15]

that is that is an awsome poem showing in depth thinking congrats

[shadow of the wolf clan]

that is so real and awsome man, you really now how to make poems