Good Girl

• Artist: joyless deception
• Description: Forgive the emo-ness XD
  I found this recently in files that I took off my old computer.
  Please leave comments; I don't mind criticism.
• Date: 06/08/2009
• Tags: good girl

She's doing so good now
She must be happy now

Smile smile
What lovely porcelain smiles

She can't be feeling that now
Not when she's so perfect now

Such a happy little girl
Such a good little girl

She's perfection at its peak

But then
If all this is true
Why does she bleed?

Comments

[joyless deception]

Thank you for the comments =3
@Silver Poison: Loves you >3<
@Fisheh_Face: Thank you, I think it's one of the few that I'm proud of XD
@AmaniPhoebe: Thanks =3 I don't remember if I thought to make it longer and more detailed, but looking at it now, I think it would be too much, and wouldn't flow as well =D

[AmaniPhoebe]

this poem is really good but i think it should go on to tell why or how she bleeds. i tink this will make the poem more complete

[fisheh_face]

I like how you repeat the word now. I like your style of writing. good job

[Silver Poison]

I like it. smile
It's goood! biggrin
Keep up the good work dearyy. smile