Dirty Liar

• Artist: ElectraShocked
• Description: Never love a dirty liar. Just a short little poem.
• Date: 07/14/2009
• Tags: dirty liar

Never love a dirty liar,
For one day he will set your heart on fire.
Burning on a filthy pyre,
He'll leave your love to rot alone,
And tell you quietly not to moan.
That he'll come back and walk the path of love,
And bring back you a baby dove.
Thats what my dirty liar said
As he walked "alone" to bed.
To meet another woman there,
The rest I know, and cannot bear.

Comments

[Zajas]

I do like this quite a bit, I don't like two-timing-lying-sons-of-you-know-whats, but I do like the poem. Though the last line almost seems distracting, it flowed better for me mentally if I chopped it off, but it works either way. ^^'
I do think line 7 would work better written, "and bring you back a baby dove." I'm a little OCD though so just ignore me. razz
Good job nonetheless!

[kamahaazi]

It suddenly leaps onto a different topic, and changes from a suggestion to a present time.

[l-Phagnomenal-l]

i like it but i agree it seems to be missing something