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• Artist: Sakura Haruno cutiecat
• Description: I came up with this. Tell me what you think
• Date: 07/26/2009
• Tags: breakup poem loss death

Tick Tock
Time goes by in the blink of an eye
Days sliping by

Drip Drop
Rain hits the cement
Heaven Cry's

Slish Slosh
Gone.........
He's Gone

Comments

[Rainbow cat FACE]

the ending seems a little too sudden.
the first two stanzas are good, but i think the last one needs a little work in comparison to the others =]
4/5