run fast

• Artist: state of fire
• Description: It's a story about some close to me who died in an abduction
  
• Date: 08/07/2009
• Tags: runfast

Run as fast as you can
Run fast but make sure you scan
For if you dont you might get caught
They might hurt you bad you might get shot
HaHa that was a laught
But it wont be when caught in a shaft
You yell you cry
But people go by
Not caring about if you hurt
So when your running always stay alert



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Comments

[Zero_Kade]

same thing that she said

[Kara Inzuki]

Nice poem, but there is quite a few spelling errors. The one that bugs me the most is "you might get shoot" because that ruins the rhyming. Please change it to "shot". Besides that, it was very good, 4/5.