Untill the day I die </?

• Artist: xBroken_Beyond_Repairx
• Description:
• Date: 08/15/2009
• Tags: love broken

If I love you for a day
if I love for a moment
then I shall love for an
eternaty and more
because when I saw
I love you its not for the moment
but its forever and always
unlike you
who's love is
but limited for
the time being
and my heartache
nevermeant nothing
to you and your lies
so go on and
lie cause when you done
I will still be here
loving you
untill the day I die
but from now on
my love isn't your
you don't deserve it any longer </3

Comments

[Yan Qi]

Not bad. 3/5 My only complaints: The shape and rhythm of this poem is inconsistant, the vocabulary can be inmproved, there are spelling and grammatical errors. But hey: poetic liscense right? ^-^

Good job. ^-^

[ElectraShocked]

Some simple spelling mistakes that can easily be fixed, but overall its quite good.
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