Angels and Demons

• Artist: XXyour_only_demon_girlXX
• Description: i dont know me and my sister made this up and i edit it so hope you like it
• Date: 09/07/2009
• Tags: angels demons

Angels by day
Demons by night

The angels take flight

Truth by dawn
Lie by dust

The angels in twilight

We come out to play jumping roof to roof
Cuz in your dreams we make you go poof

We jump trampoline to trampoline
Cuz that’s how we stay clean

Angels by day and Demons by night

We are forever in twilight

Comments

[AllHailRai]

HEY I HELPED [i deserve some credit for the help or it wouldnt be nice nick and evil eden then so even more HA`s]

[Lord Captain Sparrow]

That was pretty good.You have talent.Keep it up!

[XXyour_only_demon_girlXX]

Okay Deathcake....but I was in a hurry when I did this so yea and with the trampolines and stuff I dont really know whats up with that part I think it had to do with like good kids being angels and doing what there told and playing safe while the so called bad kids run around playing at night risk getting cought and stuff that troubled kids do. Can you kinda see that now...?

[Deathcake J]

I don't understand the imagery you use here. Are the trampolines metaphors or literal? I also suspect you meant to use dusk instead of dust? Slang can be used in writing, but 'cause might serve you better than "cuz", though I prefer to not use unnecessary truncation on my words. This is an interesting start but I think you could present a more clear message with a little polishing.

[joshleal]

4/5 i think it was too short but other than that, good!