helping hand

• Artist: Havoc_R_covaH
• Description: hope is something thats wasted, careing takes to much time. get rid of those two. and life should be fine.
• Date: 10/05/2009
• Tags: helping hand

I grew up knowing love and pertection, i grew up being kind and wanting to belong, I have forgotten all this and now it seems like a curse.i want to be left alone to do things with out help. I want to go places but thats impossible if your nice. And now i feel no more shame for what i do and only hate for things peole do. is this what it's like to have given up hope? is this what it's like to have stopped careing? now i have so many qeustions that can't be answerd but i search for one any way. I still have some hope that maybe this isn't reality when i know deep down inside that it is. but no one can help me now. even if they could i dout i would take it.

Comments

[Havoc_R_covaH]

ahaha, i had totally forgotten about this, and don worry i didn't take offense. i get what your saying. i should prolly make it look nicer to so it's not some random paragraph

[AMAIxDURIMU]

I sounded harsh in the 1st comment. Please don't think that I'm that way!!!! I'm not!!! I swear!!! Didn't mean to hurt you!!! If I did then I'm sorry!!!!!!!

[AMAIxDURIMU]

Believe me, I'm no expert when it comes to poetry (it's just a hobby of mine). If you took offense in anyway, then you could just ignore what I just commented. I love the whole concept of your writing. I write about this stuff all the time. I hope you will do more writing in the future!!! smile

[AMAIxDURIMU]

Okay, I've done some writing and reading other's writing as well. I have to say this is not bad, but could use a little more work. For this one in particular, you could use shorter sentences; less of an explination to make it more peotic rather than a complicated based story. For example, I'll use parts of your writing, "I grew up knowing love and protection/ I grew up, being kind and wanting to belong/ I, now, have forgotten/ Another curse to regret....".

[chymiro]

not bad

[ProfessorKC]

Study and research are the keys to understanding ...

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