Time

• Artist: Fate of heart
• Description: No description possible
• Date: 10/21/2009
• Tags: time

When the world was first beginning
I was older then all.
I fly by when you want me.
I take forever when you don't.
I start love but i end it.
In my reflection
I show all that has come
and all that will be
I was long before you were born and
I'll be here long after.
I am Forever.
I
am
Time.

Comments

[ProfessorKC]

It's all abstraction (playing with time as being personified) and very little "tangible" (in other words something the reader can imagine themselves) imagery. Focus on giving us a good picture as well and it'll improve what you wrote here.