if i..

• Artist: DJ Pure darkness
• Description: just something i randomely wrote up,give me your opinions and what you think about it please
• Date: 10/24/2009
• Tags: power

if i were a star, id shine brighter than the others.
if i had wings, i would lift off the ground.
if i had fins, i would swim through my fears.
if i could float, i would prance through the air.
if i were a flame, i would light the torch of hope.
if i could make my drawings come to life, i'd live in my own world.

i could do all these things..
but i have not recieved such a power...

Comments

[Pollyur]

Wonderful! You can almost taste freedom, but can't break out of your skin to grasp it. The only thing that I didn't like was the lack of proper punctuation. Overall, beautiful poem! 4/5