The Dark Times

• Artist: EmOz_NiNjA
• Description: This tells how some people feel feel, when they are constantly being looked down on, or are continuously being ignored.
• Date: 01/17/2010
• Tags: dark times

Pain, suffering, invisibility,
Time seems to have stopped, like everything is dead,
It feels like nothing, like having a blank expression,

Tears,agony, confusion,
All rush through my mind, though time itself has stopped,
Being in a cluster of emotions makes me feel sick,

Dark, unforgiven, insanity,
These feelings cause sharp pains going through my heart,
The feeling of slowly losing something precious is terrible,

When you put all the feelings together,
You get madness

Comments

[erotico mollete]

I like the structure, and organization. The only thing I dont like, is how you stopped using the time expression. First you say, "seems to have stopped" as if you are unsure. Then you proceed to write, "though time itself has stopped." I just felt as if the concept should have been carried through all 4 main stanzas. Cutting that idea off, kind of broke my mood for the poem, I had the sense of time slowing down, as if things didnt matter any more; suddenly that concept was gone. Has Potential

[EmOz_NiNjA]

i really think that these wud b the true feelings of some1 that is constantly ignored.