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The time passes....
Every second...it costs u...
Old knight...
You fought many battles...
And yet you're still in the battle field...
Even after you knew you lost..
You're tired...exhausted..
How can you still hold your sword?
How can you still lift your shield?
You're enemies...are just illusions now...
And your old armor...no longer shines..
You are no one...
And yet you fought for someone...
You were never valued...
And yet no money can buy your heart..
You're bout to die...
And yet you never felt so alive
You fall on the ground...
you feel your life fading...
You smile and you close your eyes very slowly
The end's near
And your happy inside
This is the end of one life
And the beginning of another
- by BraveHunter |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/05/2010 |
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- Title: Old Knight
- Artist: BraveHunter
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Description:
Well i hope u can see the meaning of it, the whole poem its just a metaphorical way to tell what's really behind it :P
hope u like =) - Date: 04/05/2010
- Tags: knight
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Comments (3 Comments)
- BraveHunter - 04/06/2010
- Ops that was a mistake really sometimes i do things like that cuz they sound alike thanx for pointing it ^_^
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- Scarlet_Teardrops - 04/06/2010
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Mmm--this poem is beautiful.
However, there are many things that can be done to greatly improve its quality.
One example I will give you: you're. The word "you're" is a contraction of you and are. It is not the word you're looking for here. You would want to use your. Your is an ownership word.
Like, it should be written "Your old armor". Otherwise you're calling the knight old armor. Lol. Good work. Keep writing. ^_^ - Report As Spam
- BrightStarz197 - 04/05/2010
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i like it a lot.
it is very kool i can not explain how good this is - Report As Spam
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