Sun, Moon, Stars, and Twilight

• Artist: BellaXionAnnabethBlack
• Description: i wrote it in like 15 minutes and i want to know if you all like it.
• Date: 05/27/2010
• Tags: moon stars twilight

the sun is bright and warm
and it makes me feel right at home.
the sun is daring and caring,
and makes me feel like sharing.

the moon is always high in the dark sky,
it always makes me wanna cry.
and when the day ends,
the night begins.
and i know soon,
i will see the moon.

the stars they always twinkle,
and they always make me thinkle.
the way they look in the moonlight sky,
makes my head hang high.
so i love the stars that are in the sky.

If its dark and bright,
its called the twilight.
and if you have a bad day,
and know you want to cry,
just let it out,
and let the twilight feel your pain.

Comments

[The Heal Ring]

awesome poem i like the moon

[bram toker]

The "Twilight" element in this piece combined with your username leads me to believe this is somehow connected to the Twilight Saga. Uh-oh! It's not good to do spin-offs of other literature, even in poetry. However, I thought this was a simple, pleasant poem. You were able to keep the mood in each element constant, but easily transitioned into another element. I also like how you kept up the rhyme and rhythm--until the 4th stanza. Overall, a pretty good poem.