The Snake

• Artist: iiLuvPandaz
• Description: Umm I just like to write short poems and stuff..... please tell me what you think~!
• Date: 07/18/2010
• Tags: snake

Over the hills,
Through the mountains,
Lies the small, fragile snake,

Past the sparkling blue river,
In the lush, green meadow,
Lies the small, fragile snake.

Comments

[iiLuvPandaz]

Who says it has to be a haiku? And not all poems have to rhyme

[encii]

It's not haiku and it doesn't rhyme. Poor Structure.1/5

[iiLuvPandaz]

Thanks (: I have a better version, but i lost it v.v

[bram toker]

I also enjoy short poems. They are snappy, and are useful for keeping a constant mood or tone. This poem, however, seems very broad. I still like it, though, because it's about a snake, which does not inspire much poetry (especially elegant poems like this).