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Forget him
Forget his face
Forget his kiss
His warm embrace
Forget the love you once knew
Remember he has someone new
Forget him when they play your song
Remember you cried all night long
Forget how close you once were
Remember he has chosen her
- by water_byakugan7 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/27/2010 |
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- Title: Forget
- Artist: water_byakugan7
- Description: I wrote this poem a while and found it while dumpster diving in my computer's memory circuits. After re-reading words I'd written over 7months ago, I realized it describe my horribly jacked up relationship with a dear and loyal friend of mine. Part of me really hopes we find a way to work things out while another part of me knows we never will.............. T-T
- Date: 07/27/2010
- Tags: forget
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Comments (3 Comments)
- DDrox316 - 07/30/2010
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you're welcome! haha I write poems and it's nice when people give helpful or happy comments but when they totally hash it up and pull it to shreds I die a little inside...
enough sandess! haha! that's great about your friend! I don't know you but I'm happy for you! biggrin biggrin - Report As Spam
- water_byakugan7 - 07/29/2010
- thank you for your comment and advise! I always welcome constructive criticism! The relationship between my friend and I is getting better....so Im hoping!
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- DDrox316 - 07/27/2010
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omg, so beautiful! I'm sorry this happened to you, but it happens to everyone sad
the only thing I would change is 2 lines, to make the rythm flow better?
1: forget the love that* you once knew
and 2: remember that* he has chosen her... do what you want with your poem, but it's beautiful either way smile 5/5 - Report As Spam
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