Help

• Artist: death1236
• Description: what you do to help.
• Date: 07/27/2010
• Tags: help

Oh for me I will help those who have trouble,

But I will tell you what can happen,


If we end world hunger,
Everyone can have fun on summer,

If no one fights,
Then no one would bite,

If we don't kill,
Then everyone can chill,

If we help,
Then no one will yelp,

You can start,
As easy as you finish.

Comments

[Ahseyo]

Actually, easy is the way to start. I loved it. Easy written, you can understand the words and the meaning. I've written some lyrics that are somewhat similar to this.... Very political meaning behind this. 5/5

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[kasiey_kindredspirt]

It's a good Poem,
One thing though,
Yout rhymes are really simple,
Try to come up with bigger words with more emotion to capture your readers intrest and hold them, make them want you. Make them see your opinion and how strong it is to you.
But 5/5 anyway ^^