Blue Valentine's Day

• Artist: ChiquitaChacon
• Description:
• Date: 11/12/2010
• Tags: blue valentinesday love lostlove broken

This Valentine's Day
The roses arn't red

This Valentine's Day
The roses are dead

This Valentine's Day
Hearts are broken

This Valentine's Day
'Hate' is to be spoken

This Valentine's Day
Candy is bad to eat

This Valentine's Day
The candy isn't sweet

This Valentine's Day
My heart is blue

This Valentine's Day
Is ruined because of you

Comments

[Lalawell]

Too much repetition?!?! CheesecakeTops is weird. Repetition is very common in the poem and gives it rhythm. this is a wonderfully sad poem. I have never seen anyone take Valentine's Day and make it sad. Excellenct! 5 stars!

[XxWombiexX]

how do u make writing and submit it

[CheesecakeTops]

I get the jist. Too much repetition in my opinion. Maybe combine a couple of those stanza together? Or maybe even narrow it down to one or two stanzas! Still, good job.