All That's Left

• Artist: lovealwaysadri
• Description: .... idk what to say about this...
• Date: 12/31/2010
• Tags: thats left

One petal falls.
Slowly... it hits the ground.
It shrivels up,
and looses color.



Each petal gets picked,
slowly falls,
lands and dies...



Just like that,
you tear me apart...



You take-
and take.



But never give...



Now all thats left of me,
is a stem.



Nothing..



No beauty.
No color.
No life.

Comments

[G_Guacamole__]

Well, I thought it was pretty good, even without discussing much emotion in it, you can really feel the sadness as you read through it. To me, it means simply a bad relationship. 4/5 smile

[lovealwaysadri]

thanks... i guess i could make it better.

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

What I got from this poem was: constant deflowerization. Yes, I just made that up.
Which makes me think this poem is about having one's virginity taken and then being used for casual sex. >.>
My critique is that this could have been in prose and much more elaborate. So, 2/5.
Interesting message but not executed AS well as it could have been.