12:00 AM

• Artist: reshi xx
• Description: I was writing in my Gaia Journal, writing about how tired I am. Read it to find out more. I decided to write a poem, because it sounded like a poem idea to me.
• Date: 04/05/2011
• Tags: tired morning early

It's 12:00 AM.
Back home,
It's 1:00 AM.

It's 12:00 AM,
and I am wishing to sleep,
but the TV won't let me.

It's 12:00 AM,
and my friends, back home, are asleep.
It's 1:00 AM there.

It's 12:00 AM,
and my sences are fading,
my eyes are blurry.

It's 12:00 AM.
But my mind tells me,
it's 1:00 AM.

It's past 12:00 AM,
and I really want to sleep.
Just rest my eyes.
Sleep,
like my friends.
Replenish my sences.
It's past 1:00 AM where I come from.

Comments

[UntilTomorrow08]

I like the idea of putting in the time, but you don't need to keep repeating that it's 1am at home because we got that with the first stanza. You spelled "senses" wrong, but no biggy just remember to spell check next time. Lastly, find something about this situation that you wrote about that would really stand out to the reader. What can they take away from your poem? Describe more of how you felt physically and emotionally. Keep writing! smile

[fearthecute]

wow.... do you realize that you just wrote a stupid poem on jetlag? thats is sooo bland and nonsensical.

[Liliess Kisa]

Hmm. Interesting thing to make a poem up of.