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I love the way you look at me I love the way you can be I love the way you think I love the way you wink I love the way you love I love the way you playfully shove I love you in everyway I'll love you each and everyday This cant describe the love i have for you And all i do is hope you feel this way to

Posted by: Jinxed_lette Sun Jun 29, 2008 @ 03:34am

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Commented on: Sat Jul 05, 2008 @ 05:47am

Commented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 09:54pm


	i liked the i love you parts. still sounds like sumthin id write. it could have been longer...the ending i didnt like as much

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Commented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 11:00pm


	What's wrong: The last line is just a bit cliche; if you want people to remember your poem more than the next poet's you have to try and make something stick out. Do I Like It: Yes, I think it's easy to relate to considering it's love; everyone's done it at some point or will. Worth Your Time: Yes, if you can make it your own; otherwise it'll look like countless others' work. Confidence: I think you have the potential to take your ideas and poems and make them completely your own. You have originality; it's easy to see by your avi and profile. biggrin

Commented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 11:06pm


	i like it it sounds a bit like the poem recited on 10 things a hate about you taht was aimed at heath ledger (aw poor heath takes a moment of silence) only this is about love but other than that it was good

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Commented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 11:28pm


	i actually like the repetativity in it. my suggestion would be extend that and change the last line, along with a few other cliche lines. again, your flow seems to be off some. again, this seems like one worth working on.

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