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White starry flakes that fall from the sky.
The white starry flakes that turns
everything into a snowy field.
White starry flakes that fall from the sky.
So cold, but yet so warm.
White starry flakes that fell from the sky.
Watching them fall from the sky is
like watching a million stars in the sky
fall from space down to earth.
Except they're not warm, but cold ice that's
also bright like a star.
Winter stars that fall from the sky on
a special day.
Christmas.
- by Akiho Shiranui |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/05/2008 |
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- Title: Winter Stars
- Artist: Akiho Shiranui
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Description:
This is a Christmas/Winter poem, I hope you like it ^-^
this is my first time writing a holiday poem but I'll give it my
all. =3 - Date: 12/05/2008
- Tags: winter snow christmas
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Jose Loves Ellen Page - 08/16/2009
- yea
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- Radiative - 06/17/2009
- It was okay but you used up too many sylabbles in the verses
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- R e t r o g u r t - 04/12/2009
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<3 it =). (really; first time writing a holiday poem? i wrote like a lot && your's is like a million times better then mines xD.)
BTw; I love the simile where you wrote this,
"Watching them fall from the sky is
like watching a million stars in the sky"
<3 that the most =).
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- donidori - 02/02/2009
- pretty good for your first time writing a poem but you definately need structure. Also it was too repetitive.
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- Calixte Kaori - 12/31/2008
- i think that it was okay, but i think that you used sky way too many times. its a nice poem though.
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- Dissolve the Pain - 12/29/2008
- its pretty..okay..i guess..
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- TheBookThief13 - 12/19/2008
- I could not find a real rhyme to this poem while reading it. What structure did you use when writing it?
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