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Jingle Jingle Jingle
Across the snow-topped hills
Over the frozen rivers
And avoiding the many duck bills
Comes Santa Claus and his reindeer
To give us all gifts and joy
No gifts for who drinks beer all the time
And no gifts for who acts bad
Gifts only for the good, kind souls
Who never require any type of console.
They just want it.
- Title: Christmas Gifts
- Artist: eye543
- Description: A Christmas Poem
- Date: 12/13/2008
- Tags: christmas gifts
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Comments (3 Comments)
- uchia sasuke527 - 07/16/2009
- your picture is a 2star its very ugly
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- eye543 - 12/25/2008
- Thanks^^
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- Erebus Haze - 12/24/2008
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I think you have a good emotion and feeling, but that only shows in the last few lines of the poem. Your grammar and sentence fluency also needs work, to make the poem flow better and sound less awkward.
I hope you consider reworking and resubmitting your poem. 3nodding - Report As Spam
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