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"So the murder Wasn't a murder.. it was suicide" Tim said to the police-force walking left and right a tall bald man with grass-green eyes walked in
"officer tim.. we have some bad knews.." he said taking his hand and rubbing what should be hair
"and that is?" Tim asked as he looked him straight in the eye
"You're dead.." he said pulling out a gun and pressing the trigger all of the squad jamp out infront of him...
- by Aeris Melios |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/15/2008 |
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- Title: The murder (Part 1)
- Artist: Aeris Melios
- Description: a book i have posted in a guild.. i hope you enjoy a little sample ^^
- Date: 07/15/2008
- Tags: boned256 themurder
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Lexi0927 - 09/19/2009
- okay, first of all the imagination here needs a LOT of work, the grammer does too. I'd work on that
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- chronological love story - 07/15/2008
- Pretty cool. I mean, spelling could be better.
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- A Cotton Picker - 07/15/2008
- a book? what kind? a children's book? no, wait - even those authors have more imagination than you.
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- LeonDeath - 07/15/2008
- Decent, although all the spelling and punctuation errors muck it up some.
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- xxevil_poptartsxx - 07/15/2008
- oooh cool
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