The Dream

• Artist: Plump Purple Gigi
• Description: this is part of the first chapter in a book im trying to write. i dont know if i'll ever finish it because i don't think it's good enough.let me know what you think
• Date: 09/30/2008
• Tags: dream

She was waiting, sitting on the soft grass of the murky forest. Through the edifice of trees in front of her she could see the pale light of the full moon shining down on two figures 50 feet away.
The first figure was a male wood elf resting on a tree stump. He had dark red hair that had grown past his shoulders. He was wearing a green tunic, a cream colored undershirt, brown pants, and black leather boots. The second figure was a white tiger that seemed, somehow, to have a human personality. The tiger was lying in the grass; the elf was slowly petting its gracious body.
As quietly as possible, she stood up and crept towards them. The tiger perked its ears and she froze in mid-step. After listening for a few moments, and hearing nothing, the tiger relaxed again. Suddenly, not knowing how, she knew she wasn't the only one watching this hedonistic couple.
Then, without warning, a wolf leapt out of the darkness onto the elf. Struggling with the wolf, the elf tried desperately to escape its deadly claws. She ran towards them, screaming, but no one heard her. By then animals and people were rushing out of the woods from all directions to join the fight.
Just when she got sight of the white tiger again, she saw a bear charging at it. She screamed for it and everything went black.

Comments

[-l b a m b o o l-]

im a bit confuzed y is there an elf and besides tht the descriptions r good

[Samguy2008]

Wow, seems like it could be good.

[Sydd Rose]

It has a lot of promise. One suggestion is that this should be expanded, it feels right now like a shell overview of a much longer piece. My only other suggestion is to incorporate the descriptions of the characters into the action instead of creating a quick character sketch. Message me if you don't understand that suggestion and I will explain.

[twilek_jedi]

It's a bit confusing, but the story could be good.