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"Hi". I turned around to see yet antoher person with black spiky hair,and clothes drapped with chains on the pants. "Hi, I said with no excitement. Like always. The boy frowned. "What? Do like whatca see?" "No" he said. He smiled. I rolled my eyes. "Well to bad I do." I turned around walking off to my car. Everyone ,and I mean everyone dresses emo or goth. Now I don't really care,but if you ever see your 96 year old grandma in fishnets ,and a short black,and yellow mini skirt. You'll know when it's gone too far. "Hey , wait!." Yelled the boy. I jumped inside my car,and turned it on. I turned my head to the boy. He stands there in front of me catching his breath. "What?" "You want money, a car , a drink ,a ride?" He looked at me for a second. "Do you need one of those things?" "A ride." "Oh,you speak once again." " Yea I need a ride to my house." I smiled . "Well, ok,but it's gonna cost ya." The boy rolled his eyes. "How much?" He was getting his wallet out. He looked up to see if I was kidding,but I wasn't every mile is one dollar. " How much again?" I motined my hand for him to get in the car. He walked to the passger side ,and gracefully slide into the seat. He looked at me waiting for me to do something. I was amazed that he didn't ask me anything that deals with being emo. I the car again as we rode in silence. I kept taking a glance at him now , and again. Looking at his hair. His was differnet It was down in the front ,and pushed to the far right to cover his eye. The back was spiked yp with blue highlights in it.
I thought most people in my town would have already invented this hair style ,but they didn't ,well not yet, " Ok not make a right." "Ok...hey this is my neighborhood." He smirked . "Ok now keep going straight then make a-." "Left?" "Yea?" He looked at me questionly . "This is the way to my...house." "Oh,really?" "Yea!,and it's wired I feel like-." "Make a right." I pulled on to the driveway. I looked to the right then the...left? "You live roght next to me?" He started to laugh outloud. I guess he couldn't hold it in any longer. "How?" He looed at me claming himself down . "Two days ago,my dad ,and I . Came here to check on the house, He was abour to laugh again. "What happened?" I was getting nervous knowing what I did two days ago. He smiled at me. "Did you know that you snore in your sleep? I turned red.
end of chapter 1
- by Sweet Maya101 |
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- | Submitted on 01/26/2009 |
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- Title: 30 mintues of nothing
- Artist: Sweet Maya101
- Description: it's about a girl name Alice.Who lives in a town where eveyone dresses emo,and she soon meets an new friend.(he's a guy)
- Date: 01/26/2009
- Tags: mintues nothing love
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Comments (7 Comments)
- xXthe_death_ringXx - 07/25/2010
- when is chapter 2!?!?! i wanna know lolz it was really good
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- Cinnamon Coffee Cakes - 11/01/2009
- That was ok, remember punctuation, spacing, and starting a new paragraph when a different character speaks. Also based on a stereotype, as Robot Squirrel- said. 2/5
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- Sweet Maya101 - 01/29/2009
- sorry that you don't like like I'm sorry ,and thx for the advice.^^ you not the only one who said that. he.
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- Robot Squirrel - 01/28/2009
- This is badly written and based on a stereotype! Plus, goth and emo are not styles of clothing, but music styles. You need to keep in mind that every time a character speaks it should start a new paragraph.
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- shuugamoti - 01/26/2009
- i enjoyed that, well done
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- BookWurm21 - 01/26/2009
- needs to be spell checked and space out the talking. 3/5
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- -n o r m a l _ N O T - - 01/26/2009
- tats cute at the end when he says she snores.
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