BareFoot: Preface

• Artist: The Terrible Angel
• Description: Here is the preface of a story I am trying to get started. Please give me constructive feedback.
  Enjoy!
• Date: 03/29/2009
• Tags: barefoot preface

BareFoot
Preface

I tried to lift my heavy eyelids. I couldn't. I tried again. I still couldn't. I fell back asleep.

When I opened my eyes, I discovered that I had almost forgot put it under my pillow. My only friend, Kyoko, who was a stuffed animal dog that my mother gave me, two days before her death. Kyoko was the only one I could talk to.

"Wake up Kyoko," I whispered.

Kyoko seemed to respond, "Alright Kasumi."

I rolled out from underneath my bed.

I know it's short... I'm still working on it though.

Comments

[Lil Floof]

I like it. It's cute. 5/5

[xxangelgirlxx01]

It's really interesting, even thought it's short but i'm sure you can make a really good story out of it biggrin