- Revan waits in the shadows, the savory darkness embracing her. The only light touching near her is the pale beauty of the Moon. Nearby, a limp man's body lies. Apparently a new victim of Revan in her mission to murder a member of the Black hand. a tratior in her order, but that traitor was a mentor to Revan. Even now, as she crouches in the darkness, she has some conflicting feelings about whether to murder a close friend and mentor. The Black Hand member knew that she would have doubts but at the same time knew Revan was the girl for the job. Revan makes her move to several rooms from the one that she was formerly in. once in, she scans the room quickly and finds a nice hiding spot in a high, dark corner atop a tall file cabinet. And just in time, a guard entered the room, continuing his patrol. Revan observed his movements, he moved near Revan's spot only to receive a untimely present from Revan. She leaped off the cabinet, unsheathing her small katana. The man was taking out a pack of smokes, unware of his demise. Revan allowed a smile as she plunged the sword into the man's neck, a little to the right of the spine, severing a vital vessel. the man jerked to the right, crashing to the floor with a dull thud. Revan thought, who knew these guards were so stupid? surely there has to be some smart ones here. She stuffed the body in a dark corner, and then went back to her spot atop the cabinet. surely enough, a guard came in, to investigate the small scuffle that was heard. this one was a bit smarter, had his weapon at the ready. but he made the same mistake as his pal earlier, Revan dealt with him the same manner as she did the other one except a bit quieter. She placed the body in the cabinet, the proceded to another room, the soon to be final resting place of her target. of who sat upon a formal chair before a roaring fire, Revan sat in a dark corner to weigh her choice. Should she murder her close friend and mentor where he sits or let him live and suffer a life of fugitve? she knew of the evidence, she found the evidence herself. but this Black hand member was a man that accepted her for what she was good at. but her love for the Black hand is unwavering, unbreakable. She knew this man betrayed the Black hand, and she was chosen as the vanguard of his demise. Surely the Mother Luna will smile upon this deed, as her most beloved daughter of the Night murders in her name. Revan decides the thrill of the kill is too good to pass up, she makes her move. She draws her sword, nicknamed the Blood Rose, then plunges the blood soaked blade through the chair. in a minute, the man went limp quick. the sword tore through the chair, severing his spine and destroying his heart. surprisingly, very little blood spurted out. it was a clean kill, the Mother Luna is satisfied. Revan leaves thorugh a window and returns to the Black Hand to report her success. There is one lesson, Double crossers who cross the black hand dare incur their wrath. for the Black hand is a family of assasians and butcherers, to anger the might of the Black hand is a quick death wish. But Revan has done something good for her Family, for the death of a traitor brings her the love and affection the Black Hand give their members.
- by BloodSilverStranger |
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- | Submitted on 07/09/2009 |
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- Title: Revan's Plight
- Artist: BloodSilverStranger
- Description: A assasian comes to conflict with what to do with her mission, Revan is a very beautiful assasian who has become very good at what she does. but on one mission, she must make a choice.
- Date: 07/09/2009
- Tags: revans plight
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Comments (3 Comments)
- VioletNitemare - 08/09/2009
- I liked it. It flows very well and the concept is highly original. 5/5 ^ ^
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- Jackie Tekila - 07/12/2009
- There are several errors. Keep an eye on your capitalizing and perhaps use a spell check to catch mistakes. Overall it was easy to follow. It could use a little clarification of the concept of the Black Hand and perhaps more about why this person is a mentor and so important to her that a conflict arises the way it does. I know it is explained, but perhaps just a few more sentences. Just ideas to help. As a whole I liked it. Keep up the good work.
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- hermione jj granger - 07/09/2009
- It's good. There is a couple small errors but I give it 4/5.
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