Twilight.

• Artist: T A S T Y Y
• Description: Okay... So I Seriously Made This Poem On The Spot.
  It's About My Favorite Book Series Twilight.
  
  (note: about a vampire guy, if that helps, if you have read the book twilight or the series, that helps more.)NOTE: nice comments PLEASE?
• Date: 10/07/2008
• Tags: twilight night poem

My Shining Moon
My Shining Night.
Empty Sounds
My Twilight.

My Griping Moment
My Shining Star.
Question Is,
Is It Far?

I Don't Know
I'm Unsure.
My Human Life,
Is A Blur.

Sleepless Time
Throughout The Night.
My Griping Moment.
My Twilight.

Comments

[Summer Fallwinterspring]

Yep, you caught me. stare Has nothing to do with the fact that "showing Edward's confusion" is an awful intent for ANY poem and the fact that Edward has no personality to be confused WITH.

[T A S T Y Y]

and when you say; "No, it still has no purpose" thats because you know that, that IS a good meaning, you just didn't see it ;] xD

[T A S T Y Y]

ILOST: Ty!
S_F_W_S: i understand you comments.
it's not like i've have years and years of practice, i have just started though i understand what you've said

[cash4cats]

goog good good

[Summer Fallwinterspring]

No, actually. It's still got no point. (If you haven't noticed by now, Edward has no personality besides sniffing after Bella.) The rhyme scheme is simplistic and- how can I say it- boring. Besides, short lines in poetry are designed to create tension, whereas long lines (ie: more than a breath) suggest a sense of the otherworldly.

[T A S T Y Y]

Showing*

[T A S T Y Y]

Okay, Here It Goes.
This Is Sowing Edwards Confusion.
His Nights Are Sleepless, He Is Unsure, His "star" is bella, and he is wondering if this is true, most of his human moments, are a blur, and he is just overall wondering about his life itself.

are you satisfied?