Freedom

• Artist: acnll246
• Description: It's a peom about being free and why not spend it wisely, hope you enjoy!
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: freedom acnll246 choosewisely

On the day of my birth I was set free towards freedom.
When will it end, I don't know.
When will it stop, I'm not so sure.
When will it run out, nobody knows.

Why spend your time of freedom finding out.
Why not spent it the best way you can so in the future you don't regret your past!
Spend it wisely, reading this was a wise choice to choose. 3nodding

Comments

[Pain-Glory 666]

does not really have to rhyme to invoke any meaning, though rhymes add attention, a poem is meant to merely paint a picture in your mind, and open a window into the writer's soul
here is a link to mine for example

http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=102058923#title

[iLeona-Chan]

it could have a little bit more of rhyming, but good

[Call_me_cutie]

Agreed I like your other one though. This one is still good though.

[teh_fluffer_puppers]

eehh... I didn't really like it, it didn't seem like much of a poem to me at all, if had no rhythm, and maybe it could have had a little bit of rhyming, but that's just my opinion.