Life Labels, or so they are

• Artist: nya_Neko-chii
• Description: This is my poem that I created out of pure boredom and through thinking. You might see this published elsewhere like.. poetry.com or whatnots. I am the author of this poem and I thought I'd submit this and see for myself how people really see this poem. The original title of the poem is "Life Labels... Or so They're Called". I ask that people rate this with honesty. I don't want to hear lies anymore.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: lifelabels loneliness poem child

As a child,
You can't help but not notice a thing,
So it's okay to be carefree, as they say,

But when you grow older,
You look back and realize something is missing,
But it's too late,
Time can not turn back,
No matter how much you wish things were different.
Every experience that has touched you,
Can and will follow you for life.
For example, loneliness throughout your life,
Or violence throughout your life,
Or pain throughout your life,
And so much more.

These are what everyone calls "labels".
The so-called "labels" are stuck to you,
Until the time you greet death,
No matter how much you claim to have changed.

Comments

[The-Writer-Is-In]

It's all right, but doesn't feel much like a poem to me. Seems more like something you'd say, maybe during a cryptic point in a story or something, but not really a poem…3/5

[Joeybug]

Pretty good but your spelling is off. 3 out of 5

[jennii_bish]

very touching

[Kaya Tetsu]

I liked it. Its a nice change from ryhmes and its meaning, however much we deny it is true.

4/5

[Katsumi Sakurai]

Wow your poem is really great and has so much meanning it really is nice