she's the girl

• Artist: xXxXxbabexXxXx
• Description: Another poem I wrote about having my heart dashed to peices all over again.....so if you like my poem "Bloodshed tears" you'll probably like this one 2......enjoy
  
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• Date: 07/18/2008
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She's the girl

by: Desseray Berry

She's the girl no one sees,
whom no one will ever love, whom everyone passes in the hallway but still they don't give a damn
She's the girl who made a single mistakes
She's the one that fell in love with you,
just to have her heart broken into a million peices

but you were popular
everyone knew and loved you
everyone believed you

you beat her up and tore her down,
but no one helped her get back up

when you told her you loved her, you were lying
When you promised to always care for her, you were lying

I'm that girl no one sees, no one loves
I made a mistake
but no one cares

Comments

[Xx-Mystra-xX]

... smile
..
i guess it was the way i was reading it
i just thought of that song..
but i do agree on u about the mistakes...
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[ekitten614]

It's great, but I would say work on the typos.

"She's the girl who made a single mistakes"

And lots of capitalization, punctuation, stuff like that. Otherwise, great job! (it didn't remind me of Face Down, but that's just me, lol)

[Xx-Mystra-xX]

nice job on the poem
i really enjoyed it
reminds me of the song face down
great job

[Master Woody258]

wow deep