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Dear Brother,
Today I couldn't stand
I couldn't speak
I couldn't lift a hand
You see, my dear brother
When you left, you left me here to be.
And now I don't think
I can ever get to sleep.
Dear Brother,
Today I missed you so.
When mommy slapped me down,
you weren't here to grip me in a hold.
When I cried at night
You didn't tell me about the happy-making sights
And now I don't think
I'll ever be right.
Dear Brother,
Today I turned fifteen.
I wish you could have seen.
I had no cake
I had no party
I just went to your grave
It's right by our favorite lake.
I gave you some flowers
I gave you some prayers
And now I don't think
I have anything else to share.
Dear Brother,
I'm getting older now.
My hair's brushed gray, and I don't know how.
I sit in a wheel chair
That moves slower than a snail
But the only thing I'm happy about
Is maybe soon I get to go up your route.
And now I don't think
I'll have to suffer from mommy's shouts.
Dear Brother,
I don't have much to say
But I'm coming up to see you today.
My fingers are weak
My heart rate is low
I'm all plugged up
To machines down this row
I'm ready to see you now
I'm excited too.
And now I don't think
I'll have to miss you.
Dear Sister,
I was at your funeral today.
I took your hand, and led you the way
I smiled to you
And you smiled to me
I don't think, sad could possibly be.
I missed you so much.
I really did.
And now I don't think
Our fun will ever be rid.
- by AssKetchum |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/18/2008 |
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- Title: Dear Brother
- Artist: AssKetchum
- Description: In memory of my only family member that seemed to understand.
- Date: 10/18/2008
- Tags: brother memory love death
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Hi-Skool Party - 12/04/2008
- The idea was... okay. I've seen a lot of it done, though, across ficpress and several writing forums (as I've been on them for a good four years of my life). The rhythm was a tad off, but there was a bit of emotion in it during parts that did seem to draw me in a bit more than others. A bit.
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- Soajaisou - 12/04/2008
- Jenni, I completely give you 1000/1000 for this... This poem hit something with me as well and really just wow... I am glad you wrote this.
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- Zerax223 - 12/04/2008
- tht fits into my problem XD 5/5
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- Alice of Heart - 12/04/2008
- wow
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- Monokuro No Yume - 12/03/2008
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Wow.
I'm amazed for something posted on Gaia. D8 (< doesn't much like the Gaia writing.)
I do have to admit... It felt a little awkward to read, somehow. Like off-rhythm, or maybe missing words I guess, but I may just be crazy. ^_^
It's really strong though, and truly pulls you in.
I almost want to cry now. D,> - Report As Spam
- CapnYoshii - 12/02/2008
- Wow, the only poem that I actually finished in this arena, and also the first 5 I ever gave to a poem. Good job!
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- Katrika - 11/29/2008
- Wow. It really strikes you.
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