Our Forever

• Artist: DoomeDxWafflE
• Description: A poem I wrote for my boyfriend.
• Date: 12/18/2008
• Tags: forever love

My love, my dear
Come and hear
To what I have to say
On this most wonderful day.
Know that what I say is true
When I look at you and say I love you.
Never in my life have I felt anything more real
No amount of words can describe these feelings I feel.
Your touch is electric; it feeds my soul
Seeing you each day is my only goal.
Your kisses, so sweet
Filled with passionate heat
Your eyes, the shine
Knowing that you are mine.
There is nothing I want more in this life
Than to someday make you happy and be your wife.
Come away with me
And we can be
Together and never
Leave our Forever.

Comments

[damncrazy4werewolfs]

well...do u read minds? dang it this is what ive been feeling...4 my guy. this deserves a 5

[Onyx Zhentarim]

it is very good, true. But in some line things just sort of clash, like 'no amoun of words can describe these feelings I feel' How about instead of 'feelings' put emotions? Or add a few extra words to each sentence to make it flow better.

I'm not trying to be mean, or anything, because I said I liked it. I'm just giving some advice, from writer to writer.

[finer moon star]

*tinglies* LOVE it! amazing ^^ it kinda reminds me of how i feel about someone... that isn't my b/f... heh... 5/5!

[THE PONCHOMAN]

its the best thing i ever read

[intoxicatingDestruction]

very very beautiful, love it a lot