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Love is like the wind...
...it can't help but keep coming back
Love is like fire...
...it warms even the darkest of places.
Love is life...
...without it, there's nothing worth living for.
- Title: Love
- Artist: Aribis
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Description:
that's a quick poem I made up
please vote fairly and please, PLEASE comment. I need fedback
- Date: 12/22/2008
- Tags: love
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Aribis - 03/21/2010
- I feel like the length of the sentences add to the poetic-ness of it. If I shortened, I felt that it would be choppier and it wouldn't give the impression I wanted it to give.
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- Renata Of the Volturi - 04/13/2009
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Hmmmmmmmm It doesnt flow well mostly because those sentances are kinda long You could shorten them a bit like "Love is like the wind..It will alwasy come back
Love is like fire it warms the darkest places
Love is life You can't live without it"
Or something like that just shorten them then it will flow a lil bit better - Report As Spam
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