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The lovers do their timely waltz
And forge emotions high
They embrace as part, their other's faults
Or surely love does die
Their words unfelt
Life not devote
And yet he knelt
To her revoke
Then epitaph of final say
Writ, yet seen by none
On stone unhinged, doth this lay
Yet concrete, undone
- by Formal Rice Farmer |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/23/2008 |
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- Title: Immature Love
- Artist: Formal Rice Farmer
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Description:
As a simple heart, some do not understand what the word truly means...
This is the result. - Date: 12/23/2008
- Tags: immature love breakup
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Comments (3 Comments)
- xxX3mo HeartedXxx - 12/28/2008
- nice poem it has so much understanding
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- Aramaki Kotone - 12/26/2008
- Very good. I like your use of vocabulary. I have one problem though in that 'Writ' is not a word. It should be 'Wrote' but I'm assuming you already know this and are using a little poetic license. Other than that I love it, it portrays real emotion.
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- Ijiserure - 12/24/2008
- That is soo understanding
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