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Stuck in the ground
No one around
Can’t hear a sound
Trapped here forever, eternally bound
Clenching fists
Hours missed
Feelings dissed
Case dismissed
Can’t hardly see
In front of me
Here I will be
Here in the sea
Down falls the rain
A fallen crane
A beautiful mane
All so insane
Song being sung
Time not begun
A ringing rung
Getting done
Just killing time
Silent as mimes
Clattering dimes
A crime's still a crime
Beginning to fly
Can’t really try
Seeing blind
Nothing I find
Love is forever
Never say never
Yet is ever
Sneaking so clever
Edges seared
Yet never here
Coincidence near
Living in fear
Calling the movers
Hating the users
Crazy moochers
Scared of the future
Sighting the scene
Cunning and keen
Discharge the mean
Breaking the screen
Teeth being bit
Found the First Aid kit
Distracted and missed it
Fighting the distance
Feelings now exposed
Faking masks composed
Losing what’s been posed
Yet no one truly knows
- Title: Lost in the Mind
- Artist: Keniqua
- Description: rantings of a crazy person...
- Date: 01/26/2009
- Tags: lost mind
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Comments (2 Comments)
- emmywinner56 - 07/14/2009
- i get what you mean Fo-eights Beach Fo-eights. but it is one of the better poems i've read.i really liked the 'clenching fists' stanza and from 'song being sung' to 'a crime's still a crime'.i think when it got off, that's what made it really become realistic; like it was actually written by a crazy person expressing themselves.
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- Fo-eights Beach Fo-eights - 01/26/2009
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The beginning and the end were really good, the middle was a little off.
I'm sorry I can't be more specific but I don't really no what I mean. It's not off, just some of the rhymes and wording are off.
I'm going to stop making sense now.
=) =S
It's still one of the much better poems on here. - Report As Spam