Sunrise

• Artist: saritasunshine
• Description: Alright, this isn't my favorite but my creative writing teacher liked it a lot because of its creative format. I don't know. I guess I'll just see what side you all will pick. And for the love of god, if you're going to go around and rate all of my things as ONES, leave a comment so I don't think you're just doing it to mess with me because that's what I"m thinking right now. I've never given anyone a one so you can at least have the courtesy to tell me WHY.
• Date: 02/13/2009
• Tags: sunrise

Night
First nothing
But faint stars
Pricks of helpful light
Simple non-existence

Five A.M.
Beautiful blue appears
An infant made
Out of nothing
Blue comes
From the black abyss
Open blue
Hopeful blue
Short-lived

5:30 A.M.
Sickly lavender petals
Paint the sky
Choke
On its sweetness
Suffocating
Unnatural
Ominous

6:00 A.M.
The sun burns
The sky
Setting it alight.
It laughs mockingly
At those nocturnal creatures
Unable to adjust
To its intensity
They shy away
From the light
To hide alone
Until blackness comes again

In the midst of change
Peace
Roses tickle the clouds
Soft, beautiful
Is this transformation
Too short
To truly enjoy its sweetness?
How long can the blazing sun
Be kept at bay
By my pink sunrise?

Comments

[Gravetye]

I like it. I think "The Icy Abyss" is better, but this is still pretty good.