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Can she see what life offers,
Can she see how much you love her?
She won't notice until your gone.
- by invisible4lyfe |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/20/2009 |
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- Title: Can She See
- Artist: invisible4lyfe
- Description: Can She See
- Date: 03/20/2009
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Faryata - 09/19/2010
- it was ok add...layers:> 3/5
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- Klaora - 06/24/2009
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No offense, but it really seems like /anyone/ could've written these lines. They don't provoke any thought, there's punctuation and grammar errors. There's not even enough meat on this for me to write a critique.
Nice try, but no cigar.
Better luck next time. - Report As Spam
- tonnytay60 - 03/26/2009
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3 sentences 1/5
see me for better poems (no offense) - Report As Spam
- LilJil - 03/20/2009
- nice poem, i really liked it. 5/5
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