Hospital

• Artist: angelswings07
• Description: I wrote this while my mother was in the hosptial for 9 months. She went in for a simple surgery, but the doctor messed up and put her in a life and death situation. To make matters worse, the doctor denies that she even did anything wrong. My mom did not awake for three months after the surgery, due to a drug-induced coma she was put in. She only remembers the last 2 months though. Almost all her hair fell out and she lost tons of weight! I am just lucky she survived =)
• Date: 07/06/2010
• Tags: hospital mother months doctor surgery

Back when my friends were true
my heart was not in two

Back when I had everything
my cuts would sting

Back when you be here
I would not shed a tear

But now the times have past
I knew the good would not last

I don't know why
I even try

Life is hard
I'm forever scarred

I cannot go on
Not while you are gone

Come back to me once more
Put your feet on the floor

I know you've been here far too long
And what they did to you was wrong

Let's walk out those doors
And let me hear that laugh of yours

I want the wind to blow your hair
I want you to be in my care

I want to see your face
Out of this place

We will make it out, hand-in-hand
For this is what I've planned

Little by little,
We'll make it out of this hospital

The clock will turn again
Like it did back then

Colors will return
The flame will burn

All will be restored
And your smile will again be adored

Comments

[LaffyTaffyTasty]

Very loving and touching. Doesn't have the most expressive set of vocabulary or follow a challenging poetic style, but still I congragulate you. It was better than most poetry I've come across here. It was coherent, had a good rhythmic pattern, and was expressive. It doesn't feel like a 3 or a 5, so I gave you a 4.