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I keep him under lock and key,
I try to forget him, but he is part of me,
He calls to me daily,
But my resolve is not failing,
I shall keep him inside,
And there he shall hide,
But when I am weak,
Not of body, but mind,
Blood he shall seak,
And bones he shall grind,
For he is me, and then yet not,
He is the piece that cannot be forgot,
Alty, oh Alty,
What have you done?
Alty, oh Alty,
Look at them run.
- by Shinigami Malcolm |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/16/2011 |
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- Title: Alty
- Artist: Shinigami Malcolm
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Description:
A poem about a split personality that wishes to kill.... I should really stop posting in here.... no one likes what I put up...
Oh well. "Enjoy" - Date: 04/16/2011
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Shinigami Malcolm - 04/17/2011
- Thanks. The grammar is bad cause I made it in like 30 seconds.
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- xX1Rawr1Xx - 04/16/2011
- some grammar and punctuation issues (sorry), and there are a few lines that I'd consider revising, but I see no reason why not to post it. It was an interesting topic. I think you should add to it, and give it more detail. I think seeing the way the each personality thinks, and reacts would really make this piece stand out a lot more, and give it a lot more Oomph. (:
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- Shinigami Malcolm - 04/16/2011
- I misspelled "seak" on line 9. It should be "Seek"
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