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Welcome to my world! (This is my favorite poem so far!) Can you hear me yelling? That i am in pain? Welcome to my world, where nothings the same. The darkness & sadness no one is here. Welcome to my world where every thing's to fear. When you see me crying do not worry I'm in my world where everythings gory. Spend time with me & you will see the pain & fear that's really inside me. I can't escape no matter how hard i try 'fore i can't face the darkness, i can't deny. For me this is my own hell , How long i will be here i cannot tell. Thank you for trying I'm here for good No one can save me, no one ever could. Can you hear me yelling? That i am in pain? Welcome to my world, where nothings the same. Thank you Seraphim2 for the grammer check! Grammer is not my strong point! A new poem will be put up tomorrow Please ask if you want to put it in your sig, profile etc

Posted by: Pimpin Puppyluv- Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:03am

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:35pm


	LOVE IIIIIIT!!!!!!

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:52pm


	I like it! Ohhh yesss^__^ But, I hate you evil

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:57pm


	oh that is so good!!!

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 07:50pm


	Random commet: Very good I like it alot. 3nodding

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 07:53pm


	that was one of the most beautiful things ive ever read and it describes me and i think you could publish this mrgreen

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 07:57pm


	this is very good biggrin x it sounds like something i would write XD xx

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 08:26pm


	Unorignal. :l

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 08:40pm


	Wow! That's great, the only thing is I'm not sure if you were trying to rhyme gory with worry.

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 08:53pm


	Nice poems! ;D

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 10:38pm


	Hmmm. It's okay. You need more of a broader vocabulary and you is used too many times. Also, & is not a word. It's 'and'. Spelling things out make all the difference and sound more professional. And mature. Other than that, it's a really good start. I have poems too... ...but they are only friend viewable, I'd like to show you some though. :]

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 10:42pm


	I like it! My poems just end up being the same sort of thing, over and over!

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 10:46pm


	cool. emo

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Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 01:44am


	Wow thats deep girl I like it!

Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 01:45am


	The Grass Hopper Does Not Fall Far From The Plum. Very nice. A little weird with the rythming.

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Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 02:25am


	wow that was good it tugged my heart strings . most of the time i feel that way what you described in the poem

Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 04:05am


	I love it i'ma ionto writing poems to...but this 1 is awesome!Can i put it in a sig?

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Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 05:49am


	I know there is no wrong way to write poetry... and to tell you this poem is Great! just a tip and a word of advice.... rhyme is okay... but when the words arent forced in there (meaning you just write it the way you hear it in your head there doesnt have to be rhyme) in my opinion rhyme in poetry isnt good.. but the little parts you did rhyme it sounded good... nice poem...

Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 12:24pm


	I really like you poem. It is awesome.

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Kana Uchihuugaki
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Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 03:03pm


	oh wow, that was great. I have poetry up on my journal thing too, i usually don't rhyme though 'cause that's not my strong point.

Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 05:17pm


	Pretty Good

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Commented on: Sat Jun 02, 2007 @ 07:17pm


	This is my favorite poem too! You do really good better then I can. I can write stories not poems or songs. I can also draw. You're really good though

Commented on: Wed Jun 06, 2007 @ 08:39pm


	I like the rhyme scheme. Simple, but touching. I write some poetry as well.

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