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Welcome to my world! (This is my favorite poem so far!) Can you hear me yelling? That i am in pain? Welcome to my world, where nothings the same. The darkness & sadness no one is here. Welcome to my world where every thing's to fear. When you see me crying do not worry I'm in my world where everythings gory. Spend time with me & you will see the pain & fear that's really inside me. I can't escape no matter how hard i try 'fore i can't face the darkness, i can't deny. For me this is my own hell , How long i will be here i cannot tell. Thank you for trying I'm here for good No one can save me, no one ever could. Can you hear me yelling? That i am in pain? Welcome to my world, where nothings the same. Thank you Seraphim2 for the grammer check! Grammer is not my strong point! A new poem will be put up tomorrow Please ask if you want to put it in your sig, profile etc

Posted by: Pimpin Puppyluv- Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:03am

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:04am


	hi

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:10am


	I luv poems nice

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:11am


	i like it

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:25am


	Wow awesome poem! Are you a poet? blaugh

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:46am


	Wow, your good.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 01:54am


	That's really good... I like it!!

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 02:06am


	Awsome poem! You're really good. 3nodding

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 02:15am


	LOVELY POEM I FEEL UR PAIN AND SUFFERING

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 02:17am


	this is good. if you like to write poetry, and need feedback, you could go onto allpoetry.com I have and account there, my name is just-a-lonely-girl

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 02:21am


	Righto. 'Painful' poems are way overrused. Try to be original. You also might want to check your spelling as 'gorry' is not right. The rhyming is good, and I'm not trying to be mean. Just offering some advice. Spell check mostly. Good job though. biggrin

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 02:26am


	The world fades in the power I hold Hard to stay not to fly to be all the same just to be with you

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 02:57am


	kool ^^

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:32am


	This is an awesome poem. I really like it. I'm also a writer. I'll be posting up some of my own work either tonight, or tommorow. If you could, take a look at it and tell me what you think.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:32am


	i love this poem!!!! it is so good! i wish i could write this good! i give u 10 stars! (out of 10)

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:33am


	its sweet i love it heart biggrin

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:35am


	OMG!! You are my friekin hero!! I luff your work!

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:40am


	THIS IS AMAZING!!! I know you don't know me but this poem is AWESOME! is it ok if I put it in my pro?? ill put your gaia name next to it

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:44am


	That's really good. ^^ You have a knack for writing poetry. It's a bit emo, but I write a lot of emo poems, so I really have no room to talk. XD

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:17am


	ur poem is awsome it's touching to me!!! Great job on that

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:18am


	Its alright, it seems a bit repetitive though, try to vary it. Oh and it needs to have an exciting ending, something that will surpise and excite the reader. Trust me, ive been writing poems for 6 years

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:23am


	Cool poem, now comment mine. D<

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:26am


	I like it, it's very good.

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:31am


	Several grammatical errors, generic emo subject matter, overall I don't like it.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:43am


	omgosh! thats soooooo good!!!!! awsome job!! i loved how everything ryhmed really well and made sense ^^ awsome job!!

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:48am


	s**t that is awesome, I love it.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 05:51am


	Thanks for everyone's opinion

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:23am


	Very good!!! Can't wait to read some more!

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:26am


	Very nice poem, deep.

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:31am


	There's one thing I don't get. "Can you hear me yelling? That I am in pain?" I think what you meant was....Can you tell that I am yelling? That I am in pain? Also....the whole darkness and sadness in poetry thing got old a while ago. Unless there's a deep connection and it has to do with something like the war or the loss of a family member or some s**t like that....it just isn't good.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:33am


	Horribly unoriginal subject. Choppy. I couldn't make sense of most of it. Most poems, if you work hard enough at editing, can be good, but I really think that this one can go nowhere. Sorry, but I'm being honest.

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:36am


	THAT WAS AWESOME eek

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:53am


	it's pretty good, i want to go to your world

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 06:57am


	i think its better than the others but, it's still sort of choppy. torwards the end, it was very short and brief, while the begining was longer.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 07:19am


	I read a few of them, and I really like this one. Good job. :]

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 07:28am


	Thats a pretty good poem, what you need to remember is it dont matter what other people think about it as long as your talking about what you feel and what is in your heart

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 07:39am


	xd awesomeness!! xd

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 08:09am


	...........I like this one a lot more

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 08:12am


	...........I like this one a lot more

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 03:45pm


	Well, I have to say...this is really a beautiful poem. I loved it xd ahaha. You don't know me, but I saw you post something that said to check out your journal for your poems in this one thread so I decided to check it out. I see these types of poems everywhere, but this one is one of the best! GREAT JOB!!!

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:30pm


	[~this poem is very good +]~]

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 04:53pm


	´¯`·.·´¯`·.·´¯`·.· En.. not so crazy about... well i never liked poems... ´¯`·.·´¯`·.·´¯`·.· 436! People Love,Like Scared? Fans:028 (This Fan count isn't for my Signature) I will have Fans names in my profile.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 05:10pm


	I write poems aswell. I like yours. Its nice. :3

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 05:13pm


	DANG! you got 42 comments eek as always good work biggrin

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 05:14pm


	wow its awesome

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Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 05:15pm


	Very good. I like it a lot.

Commented on: Fri Jun 01, 2007 @ 05:17pm


	Wow, just wow. That is very emotional, too beautiful to describe how much this expresses the torture of the unknown. if I could rate it, a perfect 10/10.