I beleive that in one of my previous entries, I mentioned a poetry project that I must do. One of the requirements was to write a poem of extended metaphore. I got bored in seventh period honors biology yesterday and wrote this. I usually hate my own poetry but I actually think it's decent. As I was re-reading it to myself at lunch, my friends took it and started reading it, passing it around the table. Surprisingly, they all thought it was remotely good. But many of them also thought it was emo. I am warning you all now, I did not write this with intentions of sounding emo. I just thought of random metaphores that I thought sounded cool. Anyway, here goes.
Heart of darkness, heart of light Forsaken souls grasp for starlight But stars care not for mortal pain The broken can never be whole again
Shards of crystal, shards of stone Swallow your pride and cry alone But tears hold no comfort for mortal pain The broken can never be whole again
Blade of lightning, blade of steel Fall to your knees and hope to heal But hope knows nothing of mortal pain The broken can never be whole again
Wall of fire, wall of snow Face your fear and let it go For fear is the source of mortal pain So the broken can never be whole again
Well, there it is. Feel free to compliment or criticize, just please don't flame. Disclaimer: The final two lines of the final stanza were improved upon by rikuanddaisuke. The original lines were "But fear thinks nothing of mortal pain/The broken can never be whole again." I like the new version better. Thanks, Riku-chan! heart
xxForsakenFantasyxx · Thu Jan 10, 2008 @ 09:09pm · 4 Comments |